For this section, I will be referencing the first and final drafts of my first paper of the term.
Introduction:
The difference in the introduction of my paper is very different. From the first to the second draft, I had added about 5 lines of text which added more background and context to the authors that I reference throughout the paper, instead of a weak intro that barely mentions both of them. I also added more about my focus and idea in the paper, instead of glossing over it in a quick thesis at the end of the paragraph, like I had in the first draft.
Evidence & Explanations:
This is what I had edited the most through the paper. I had changed some of my evidence and expanded quite a bit on my explanations. In the first draft, explanations were rushed and choppy in the flow of the paper, but I added more and expanded more, so the reader would have a better idea of my own ideas. This fleshed out my paper significantly and made it not only flow better, but made it more understandable and left less questions in the minds of the readers.
Reorganization:
I didn’t have too much reorganization between my first and final drafts of this paper. A few sentences were reworked and switched around, but I hadn’t changed paragraph order at all for this paper. This form of editing and revising didn’t even occur to me when I was working on it.
New Paragraphs:
In my first draft, I had condensed ideas and shortened explanations and evidence to fit them all into the same paragraph. In my revisions, though, I recognized the fast pace and it seemed choppy, so I separated and expanded on the ideas in the final draft. This helped with the overall flow of the paper and helped keep track of the ideas that I wanted to get across.
More Local Changes:
These changes weren’t as dramatic as the others, but they are present through the paper. They are just word or phrase changes throughout to make the flow better. This is surprisingly one of the not as frequent edits that I did, but I didn’t see as much to edit locally than any of the other edits.
